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Chapter 11. Personal Best: Revising and ... > Come Again? Revise by Rewording - Pg. 125

Personal Best: Revising and Editing 125 Dear John, I want a man who knows what love is all about. You are generous, kind, thoughtful. People who are not like you admit to being useless and inferior. You have ruined me for other men. I yearn for you. I have no feelings whatsoever when we're apart. I can forever be happy--will you let me be yours? Mary Version #2: Dear John, I want a man who knows what love is. All about you are generous, kind, thoughtful people, who are not like you. Admit to being useless and inferior. You have ruined me. For other men, I yearn. For you, I have no feelings whatsoever. When we're apart, I can forever be happy. Will you let me be? Yours, Mary So don't neglect the little guys--commas, periods, semicolons, and colons--as you focus on revi- sing the words, phrases, and sentences in your writing. Come Again? Revise by Rewording Write Angles