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Word Weeds

Now that you have learned to recognize and eliminate wordiness, this exercise provides additional practice pruning what you write. You may rewrite each, but be careful not to lose the original meaning.

1: It has been my wish for a considerable period of time to gain entrance into the field of accounting. This is due to the fact that challenges of my intellect are what challenge me.

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A: I have always wanted to go into accounting because it challenges me.
2: To me it appears that Smith did not give any attention whatsoever to the suggestion that had been recommended by the consultant.

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A: I believe Smith ignored the consultant’s suggestion.
3: In the past there were quite a large number of firms located on the West Coast offering us competition. At this present point in time, the majority of those firms have been forced to go out of business by the hardships and difficulties of the present recessionary period of business contraction and stagnation.

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A: Many of our West Coast competitors have gone out of business because of the recession.
4: It is the policy of this company in every case to proceed with care in testing each and every new product under development by us, and such testing must precede our arriving at any positive conclusion with respect to the effectiveness of said product.

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A: It is company policy to carefully test all new products for effectiveness.
5: In the event that Wilkins does not come forth with an expression of willingness to lend us assistance in the matter of financing this project, it is entirely conceivable that we will not be able to make the required acquisitions of raw materials we need without help.

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A: If Wilkins does not help us financially, we may not be able to acquire needed raw materials.




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